Featherless Biped's "The boi in the belfry is crazy" Thread

[Featherless Biped]

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1. Dragon's Head
2. Magic Cabinet
3. At the Martian Embassy
4. My Accomplishments of Late
5. Self Portrait as Evil Sadomasochistic Lesbian Vampire
6. Objectivity
7. Ghazal of Restlessness
8. Teaching My Sweetheart to Swim at Straddie
9. Envy
10. Boxcar
11. Erasure
12. At the Earth Embassy
13. Custody
14. Kinky Sevenling I: Fear
15. Kinky Sevenling II: My Limits as a Top
16. Kinky Sevenling III: Humpty Dumpty Is a Genderqueer Dominant Role Model
17. Kinky Sevenling IV: Venus in Frustration
18. Kinky Sevenling V: Fucking Negotiation Checklists
19. Kinky Sevenling VI: The Natural Order
20. Kinky Sevenling VII: Patter Song
21. My sweetheart teaches me to hypnotize chickens in Little Valley
22. Bird sketches
23. Orpheus
24. The Unravelling Scarf as a Model of Time
25. NaPoWriThiMi
26. True Story
27. An Open Letter to the Young Men of Silicon Valley
28. Notes from a Marin County Wedding
29. Doctor Biped's Finishing School for Wayward Young Men
30. Dragon's Tail

[Hare]

A bat for your 'boi'. .......all gone now.
Good wishes for NaPo

[JFN]

Pic removed as per Mod request - have a good NaPo (but don't go crazy)

[merelynn]

Happy NaPoMo!

[5th column]

Shit. Is it really April already.........

[stealthefleece]

For you.

[Andrea345]

Featherless - I started reading your thread after one sake two masu and couldn't comment. I came back the next morning and started the thread over and there's much to enjoy here. "Self-Portrait" is a fun piece of verse. Solid voice and the consistent character. No nits to pick.
Dragon's Head, the "nirvana where orgasms come from" and the end were killer. The rhythm was spot on as well.
Magic Cabinet - thoughtful imagery, love the corkscrew moment but not more than the magic trick.

I'm enjoying the Earthling series.

The Kinky Sevenlings - "My Limits as a Top" made me go start your thread from the beginning. I have to second questioning the word, "brave," but up to that point, I thought It solid.

The end to "Natural Order" was a hoot! "Patter Song" has a couple of trips for me (l3 & l4), but I'm no G&S sexpert, tha's fer sure. The end was great too.

Much to enjoy here,
-a

[Jee Leong]

The Kinky Sevenlings are fun! I like Venus in Frustration particularly, the tight wordplay reminds me of Shakespeare's misogynistic sonnet "A woman's face with nature's own hand painted." You are putting ideas in my head, not originally there, of course!

[Featherless Biped]

Oh, thank you all!

Brian, you're a master of meter and a wizard of wordplay, so that's a lovely compliment coming from you.

Julie, one of the best things about Australia is that you can smell the eucalyptus. And the last line of KSII seems like it's universally reviled, so that makes complete sense. (It occurs to me that there are better things to do here. "Sunflower" rhymes with "devour", for instance.)

Andrea, My Limits as a Top is a sort of skew facet of the thing, rather than its essence; I'm glad you enjoyed, and thank you for adding to the consensus. I think you're an acknowledged person who can write well about sex, so the comments are very appreciated.

Jee, I am sure that you were completely innocent of all this sex stuff before I showed up to corrupt you. (Didn't we have an argument about whether that sonnet was misogynistic one time? Unfortunate that it's a little too messed up to give to the object of one's affections in sincerity.)

OK, erotic is when you use a feather, but kinky is when you use the whole chicken, so it's time to change gears and do the annual chicken ditty!

[Featherless Biped]

My sweetheart teaches me to hypnotize chickens in Little Valley

You press their heads to the ground
and draw an invisible line, beginning
at the beak, stretching toward the horizon.
It blows their nine-volt minds.

The Polish hen dies for a minute and half,
cycles through the Wheel of Time as the head of a mop,
a dazed half-creature, and finally,
a chicken again.
I am squeamish.
Do the chickens like it?
It bothers the rooster when you hypnotize the chickens.
Yes, but does it bother the chickens?
The rooster is jealous.
Yes, but what about the chickens?
The chickens are okay.

[Sorella]

And likewise about yours in my thread -- and Happy Crazy NaPo! Picture a cute rabbit spreading daffodils -- we are poets, we need only words!

[Featherless Biped]

Since Dunc has started, and I'm in Canberra where it's April 1, here goes...

[Featherless Biped]

Dragon’s Head

Fantasy begins like fast car,
crashes through its own center like tantalize or dismantle,
and ends in messy, broken glassy, misery.
It is not enough to untie the rope,
chip the wax off the bedposts
soak the stains in club soda,
delete the recording.
You can’t erase the question marks
where you ran your nails over her skin.
You would unkiss those bruises into pink oblivion,
vibrate the orgasm back
to whatever nirvana orgasms come from,
burn the air where you inscribed your dirty talk,
if only summon meant control.

Silly you. In your hunger you reached for a girl,
delicate as a Faberge egg,
planned to have her and eat her too,
thought how good she would taste inside,
thought you could clutch without crushing.

[Emilio]

Featherless, what a wonderfully strong start, "crashes through its own center like tantalize or dismantle," and "You can’t erase the question marks/where you ran your nails over her skin" is most memorable. I read this over a few times, great work!

Best,

[PClem]

Excellent. Delicate as a Faberge egg. An expensive undertaking. Fast car, indeed. Great start.