2 April 2015
TO MY DEAREST FRIENDS
Outlive me, Friends!
I wish it true
you bury me
and not I you.
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but say it is my humour
2 April 2015
TO MY DEAREST FRIENDS
Outlive me, Friends!
I wish it true
you bury me
and not I you.
fun and felicitous, really?
It seems like it would work as a nice epitaph if you changed the tense a bit.
certified napo whacko
I think we all wish for that so as not to have to grieve. very Shakespearre-ian!
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I cannot see the word "wee" and not think of Robert Burns.
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Sweet!
passing for a fool and a churl
Loved the energy of 'Overture', quite musical!
Jen
Ray to rhyme with bay; not Rae to rhyme with bae
It's a very sweet sentiment, wittily expressed... but then comes the moment where you have to work out whether to agree or disagree, and both seem a little rude. I'll agree owing to our disparate ages, but hope that neither of us has to bury the other for a long time.
but say it is my humour
Prooftheory - an epitaph? Wouldn't that be wise after the event?
Cookie - Hiya babe! Yeah, Will and me. we're like that!
Dave - And mention of Rabbie always reminds me of this.
Krista - glad you liked it!
Jen - the whole NaPo clan as an orchestra - great idea!
Rachael - yes indeed. I had nothing too hasty in mind.
Thanks for calling by, good people!
Regards / Dunc
but say it is my humour
3 April 2015
THE TENANTS
"Who’s there?"
I said.
"Mum and Dad,
in your head."
"Why? You’re dead."
"Not quite true.
Still we tell you
what to do."
I found my children
further on.
"Why?" I said.
"You’re grown and gone."
"You keep us
inside too,
so still we tell you
what to do."
soul slasher in training
Dunc,
Overture 2015 has left me with a great big grin on my face and much less of an ache in the gut. (This NaPo stuff is hard!)
Again, I am grinning with To my dearest friends. Nicely done.
Angela~
soul slasher in training
Ha! You were posting Tenants when I was posting the above. I am a momma, so I totally get this little ditty.
Angela~
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I enjoyed 'Overture' when I first read it, and enjoyed it even more now I'm realising what NaPo is. 'To my Dearest' is fun and sweet. 'Tenants' is great, too. I like how you treat serious subjects with such good humour - and gentle humour. It makes me want to bake you lemon drizzle cake and say 'thank-you'.
Sarah
Brooding Pterodactyl
Hi Dunc, short and sweet so far. Looking forward to your Duncly sense of humanity and play.
Fun and felicitous PFFA patron
reminds me of Ben Jonson...don't see a tense problem worth ruining this for.
Fun and felicitous PFFA patron
Dunc, ridiculously jealous of the way you can always make me laugh and make the words sing too. The tenants was wonderful and poignant.
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