a piece of twig

[Dunc]

Jee

This Pisces - an expansive view of your fish. I feel better about eating them if I think they don't meditate much.

the concierge is handsomely loaded with possibilities.

april snow and snow again - a fascinating use of compression, self-allusion and implication. (But my image of you is more as a New Yorker than a Minneapolitan.)

Father Ho gone rafting in the US is indeed a thing of curiosity. But your paper boats have the delicacy of - well -paper boats, an almost nostalgic evocation.

Great reading (and thinking).

Regards / Dunc

[cookala]

heya Jee! yes, don't miss the bus! the image of Ho Chi Minh made me laugh. love the paper boats. enjoying the variations on subject in your thread.

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, Dunc and cookala! Dunc, I was, what's the term, networking in Minneapolis.



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[delph_ambi]

the concierge recommends
the fried yam with shrimp
and catching the bus

They're all good, but this is my favourite. I re-read it several times, it told so much story in so few words; painted a vivid picture of a place I don't know, but you took me there.

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, delph.



no daffodil
but the stem tip glows—
cock crowing in the dark

[5th column]

I like this last for the double time the last line is putting in.

[Scrow]

Me too, although the image it conjures up is oddly luminous.

It's hard to pick a favourite of these - they're all good. I've waited, to see which images stick with me, and my 'sticking' image isn't that of the concierge, which is odd, because I thought it would be. For what it's worth, the two juxtaposed bridge poems, and then the image of the paper boats floating stayed with me.

Sarah

[larryrap]

Hi Jee,

I'm following these with amusement and the regular enjoyment of your confident, original strokes.

[Angela]

Jee,

I was born in Minneapolis, but my family and I left when I was just a baby. Reading your haiku and haibun has proven to be very interesting. I particularly like in minneapolis and Minneapolis haiku. Lovely images. I wish I knew the place.

Angela~

[Jee Leong]

Thank you, 5th, Sarah, larry and Angela, for reading and leaving a comment. Angela, here's another Minneapolis thingie for you.



Minneapolis haiku

morning headache—
the insistence of birds
in loring park

[Steven]

floating
through the lock and dam
paper boats

Perfect for me -- because it just draws together two worlds, the real and the imagined, for a fleeting moment.

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, Steven!



forsythia in bloom
very soon i will have forgotten writing
forsythia in bloom

[mjd888]

Hi Jee

The unexpected repetition in the most recent was really pleasing. It reminds me of times out walking in nature when anxious thoughts occasionally interrupt a tranquil mind, then recede again. A very thought provoking piece of writing.

Matthew

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, Matthew!



no smoking in the park
she tells her husband
beside the lenten rose

[Jee Leong]

wood shavings fly
from the workman’s drill
spring and fall