a piece of twig

[Janet]

Hi Jee- so nice to read you again! Your haikus are delightful wake up calls, your lines gently tapping away at the reader's spirit. I especially love the tree holding up its branches/yellow traffic signal in the first and **everything** about the last...describe/the eclipse of the moon/to the blind. I call that mastery.

[Dunc]

Jee

The Hudson Tortoise and the Electric Hare - just some Billy Joel in the background and I'm in that NY state of mind.

What's next?

Regards / Dunc

[cookala]

heya Jee! the Brazilian Movie is off to a great start, but it's those last 3 lines that kick ass

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, Scavella, Janet, Dunc and cookala!


After years of refurbishment, the Cooper Hewitt Design Museum opens its doors
to the public, but its garden is still a churn of red soil.

No lilacs bloom
in the ever-returning spring
for Abe’s black pall

[Emilio]

Jee! I love that the power in these poems is all that's being said, without being said. The one I keep going back to, is the first poem, Two Weeks Into Spring, the imagery the creativity. Wonderfully done,

Best regards,
Emilio

[Speug]

Hello Jee, I really like the Brazilian movie one, although it appears to describe the thing I never want to think of when writing.
Cheers,
Paul.

[HowardM2]

Fine work as always, Jee; I think my favorite of these is "The Hudson Line," as I particularly like the way contrast is used, difficult to do in such spare work. Excellent.

[PClem]

two weeks - like the juxtaposition between nature and city and the cautionary note the tree provides.
big dog - of course, a little something erotic
hudson - I think this must mean more to a New Yorker
describe - what is beyond description. Lovely.

[Jee Leong]

Thanks, Emilio, Paul, Howard and Laurie!



in the gay lake
the rowboats are powered
by spring wind

[Jee Leong]

used toothpick
flocculent
as apple cores

[GreaterMandalaofUselessness]

Brazilian Movie. Either it turns you on or it doesn't, I guess, and how do you explain it to some one it doesn't?

the Cooper Hewitt Design Museum. I think lack of cultural knowledge gets in the way for me here.

"the gay lake" intrigues me, the rowboats are powered by wind. Doing things differently maybe? The spring wind and not having to row add an uplifting note.

That last one: thanks for that image!

BTW, did you see this podcast reading and discussing Rattle Japanese forms issue?

-Matt

[kristalynn]

These are all really great. I'll keep coming back to enjoy and for inspiration. I was about to list my faves, but realized I was just listing all of them.

[Dunc]

Jee

No lilacs - I may need to visit the Smithsonian to grasp that one.

Whereas the air, the light and the water of gay lake take delighting flight.

used toothpick - urk, all too vivid.

Most enjoyable.

Regards / Dunc

[Carla Ruth]

Hello Jee,

two weeks into spring and describe are my favourites so far. So much packed in so vividly. Also, "flocculent" is perfect in your last. It made me think of that Mark Twain (?) quote - "the right word, not its second cousin".

[Donner]

Hi, Jee,

Anyone who thinks that you can't say everything you want in a few syllables, and cleverly, should read your pieces. I also like that they open up places to me that I've never had the chance to visit and in an intimate way. (I'm trying not to be dirty here.)

Your thread title, the hudson line and no lilacs bloom - perfect.

Donner