Some Czerny for the Poetry Bump

[Arlene]

Me too, loving the last line, seeing 'the past' looking through its flaky self, in the second lune, and the whole of the first is gorgeous, 'jessamine,' the 'z' sound a 'dim' 'glimmer' in the still wood. Just lovely.

[cookala]

hi Howard! you wrote some amazing stuff in 2013, so I'm excited to see you return to the form. You've also inspired me to "lune" a little during napo this year.
lune xci - lovely picture, pretty words
lune xcii - love the wisdom in L3 and the way you show it. nice.

[HowardM2]

Thanks again, everyone.

avalanche -- No, I've not heard of "barku" but I can imagine them being fun (and a bit dangerous).

krystalynn, Arlene, and cookala -- Glad you found things you liked. Good luck with your lune, cookie; did you see my note in WH that Maureen Thorson who created NaPo is doing all lunes this year, too? There's a link to her page in that thread. I actually got to meet her at Emory in Atlanta a couple of years ago; she's definitely fun.

[HowardM2]

lune xciii

curried goat served in
herbed gravy
exhales Jamaica

[cookala]

hi Howard! yes, I read and I did check out her blog - pretty cool. lucky you getting to meet her - will have to check out her works. been trying to write some lunes today - got a few I'll post in the coming days. (one's for you, because your writing inspires me to be better at my writing.) can't tell you how much it means to see your comments to me re:rhyming - perhaps, sometimes, a brief sleep allows things to settle into focus and gel? then again, sometimes it's pure serendipity. I feel like a lot of my poetry is just that, the gift of serendipity.

lune xciii - besides making me drool a little I like that unexpected last line - gotta remember that tactic!

[Steven]

I really like 'weathered paint fractures...' . That's a hell of a lot of time to compress into such few lines.

The latest one is much more sensual, with a good use of the verb 'exhales'.

[Jenlars]

Howard, now here is a form I get behind. Short, evocative, poetry shots. How I love'em. The second one about the peeling paint is the one that sticks. Have a great April!

[Dunc]

Howard

Every Czerny begins with a single step, if I recall aright.

xci is elegantly tight, and (as they said) 'dim' is the pivot. You have a practised affinity with the vegetable kingdom.

xcii — 'cupped' is admirable.

xciii — didn't see curried goat coming. Great compression, clear image of hot and full-flavoured.

Good reading.

Regards / Dunc

[DiggerTractor]

Hi Howard, I love the discipline of these and how they're so evocative. The peering into the past-ahhh, just solid emotion. And xciii evokes fabulous memories of Jamaica.

[HowardM2]

cookala, Steven, Jenlars, Dunc, DiggerTractor -- Thanks for stopping by, reading, and taking the time to comment; I always appreciate your interest, and glad you found things to enjoy.

[HowardM2]

lune xciv

naked in the morning
light you are
each day a new world

[5th column]

The lack of punctuation is either infuriating or an opportunity to read this in different ways, depending your level of OCD...

[HowardM2]

5th column -- Lunes are especially inclined to lead one to thwart one's own OCD and experiment with non-punctuation and other such-like stuff; some ambiguity may ensue, so one probably shouldn't operate heavy machinery while reading or writing them.

[HowardM2]

lune xcv

dragonfly wings blur
to pale brass
in the failing sun

[Mike M]

I like the ambiguity of xciv where the reader supplies the punctuation. These are all very dense and visual