Angela's Third Time's a Charm Thread

[Angela]

I have hemmed and hawed long enough. Jumping in head first... Again. They say (Who in the hell is "They" anyway?!) third time's a charm, right?! *IFT*

x1) xx
x2) xx
x3) Train wreck
x4) xx
x5) After we fight
x6) Self Portrait
x7) Freak
x8) Butter Mold
x9) Butter Mold 2
10) Maui Wowie
11) Ten Minutes Spent on The Voodoo Sanitarium Tour
12) Grilled Sourdough
13) On Why Cleaning Before Bed is a Joke
14) Butchering the Blues
15) The internet says I have a damaged psyche
16) Peach Picking
17) Sick of you
18) I can't hear
19) To sweeten the bitter salad
20) Lemontide
21) From Gravlax to Gravitas
22) College Credit
23) Whirligig
24) Headline: BDSM Entrepreneur Hawks Notions!
25) Remembering Grandma Sally
26) Voodoo Sally
27) This custom poem creates space
28) Making a pot of Cullen Skink
29) The Penultimate Poem
30) Truffle Hunting

[PClem]

[Andrea345]

thou art ambitious to number thine days already thusly. *le sigh*** Yeah, I want those charms without the Lucy ^^^ posted above.

[new leaf]

Let this be the one.



Happy NaPo, Angela.

[Angela]

Thank you three for the welcome!

This?! This is what I cook up for my very first poem on the very first day?! Mercy, it's gonna be a very strange month! Ha!

[Acolyte]

Jumping in is faster but usually less painful than creeping in. Not sure if NaPo and pools are a good metaphor, though. Maybe I should tackle that in a poem! Either way, good luck this NaPo.

"Hoarder" - what a fascinating voice rambling through two stories at once, the way we mortals do. The tremble of narrator's-not-quite-all-there was well done throughout.

[Featherless Biped]

I love your narrator and her stoner macrame bag! And little anecdote about the useless potholders, and the bigger anecdote about the thrifted pot! This person sounds kind of fun to hang out with. (I'm terrible.) I cannot imagine wanting one of those useless bags with all the holes in it.

[Janelo]

Hey Angela.

Pleasure to meet you and all those niceties.

Positively great voice in your first post. Plus bargello is a new term and by the sounds off it, right up my kitschy alley.

Keep on truckin', soul sister.

Look forward to what's next.

Janello

[Mimic_Octopus]

A strident, kicky piece to kick off with. I love the frantic pace, and can practically see the wild hand gestures that accompany the tale. Stacks of fantastic detail. Ace start.

[Angela]

Thank you, Acolyte, Rachael, Janelo and Mimic.

[kamala]

Gleep! Well, the poems are creepy as hell - I'm afraid I had to read the second one with my eyes closed! I suspect you'll be chewing on it some more in the future.
Great character building and consistency of voice in both. I particularly like the building intensity in the first, and S3 with its counted stitches and swirling colours. Oh yes, and the punning title. :-)

[Mittens]

Hi Angela! Hoarder is so much fun - I can see your N so clearly in my mind just from the words you've put in her mouth. Steampunk is definitely creepy but in a fascinating way. I love S1 with the jagged knife skipping along the tops of N's taste buds.
Great start, looking forward to more!
~Laura

[Dunc]

Angela

Hoarder - The shopper's stream of consciousness / dramatic monologue, through the materials and over to the ounce bags and back to both.

Steampunk - a trippy poem, and not the happiest trip either. As a poem, it might work better with a centre to the narrative, but as a sort of record, it has its own weirdness.

Keep 'em coming.

Regards / Dunc

[anenome]

Hoarder is a hoot, made me feel I need to loosen up! 'bargello stitchery' is spellbinding.
Steampunk is certainly original and alliteration made it sound good out loud.. wishing you a good napo

[mjd888]

Hi Angela,

Superb sounds and consistently creepy tone in Steampunk. 'Pipeworks similar to veins' is a fantastic image.

Matthew