Angela's Third Time's a Charm Thread

[Angela]

I have hemmed and hawed long enough. Jumping in head first... Again. They say (Who in the hell is "They" anyway?!) third time's a charm, right?! *IFT*

x1) xx
x2) xx
x3) Train wreck
x4) xx
x5) After we fight
x6) Self Portrait
x7) Freak
x8) Butter Mold
x9) Butter Mold 2
10) Maui Wowie
11) Ten Minutes Spent on The Voodoo Sanitarium Tour
12) Grilled Sourdough
13) On Why Cleaning Before Bed is a Joke
14) Butchering the Blues
15) The internet says I have a damaged psyche
16) Peach Picking
17) Sick of you
18) I can't hear
19) To sweeten the bitter salad
20) Lemontide
21) From Gravlax to Gravitas
22) College Credit
23) Whirligig
24) Headline: BDSM Entrepreneur Hawks Notions!
25) Remembering Grandma Sally
26) Voodoo Sally
27) This custom poem creates space
28) Making a pot of Cullen Skink
29) The Penultimate Poem
30) Truffle Hunting

[PClem]

[Andrea345]

thou art ambitious to number thine days already thusly. *le sigh*** Yeah, I want those charms without the Lucy ^^^ posted above.

[new leaf]

Let this be the one.



Happy NaPo, Angela.

[Angela]

Thank you three for the welcome!

This?! This is what I cook up for my very first poem on the very first day?! Mercy, it's gonna be a very strange month! Ha!

[Acolyte]

Jumping in is faster but usually less painful than creeping in. Not sure if NaPo and pools are a good metaphor, though. Maybe I should tackle that in a poem! Either way, good luck this NaPo.

"Hoarder" - what a fascinating voice rambling through two stories at once, the way we mortals do. The tremble of narrator's-not-quite-all-there was well done throughout.

[Mimic_Octopus]

A strident, kicky piece to kick off with. I love the frantic pace, and can practically see the wild hand gestures that accompany the tale. Stacks of fantastic detail. Ace start.

[Angela]

Thank you, Acolyte, Rachael, Janelo and Mimic.

[kamala]

Gleep! Well, the poems are creepy as hell - I'm afraid I had to read the second one with my eyes closed! I suspect you'll be chewing on it some more in the future.
Great character building and consistency of voice in both. I particularly like the building intensity in the first, and S3 with its counted stitches and swirling colours. Oh yes, and the punning title. :-)

[Mittens]

Hi Angela! Hoarder is so much fun - I can see your N so clearly in my mind just from the words you've put in her mouth. Steampunk is definitely creepy but in a fascinating way. I love S1 with the jagged knife skipping along the tops of N's taste buds.
Great start, looking forward to more!
~Laura

[Dunc]

Angela

Hoarder - The shopper's stream of consciousness / dramatic monologue, through the materials and over to the ounce bags and back to both.

Steampunk - a trippy poem, and not the happiest trip either. As a poem, it might work better with a centre to the narrative, but as a sort of record, it has its own weirdness.

Keep 'em coming.

Regards / Dunc