Dunc, Brian, bop, Sorella, new leaf -- thanks a million for visiting and for your comments.
Brian - the form is an attempt at some variation on the theme of WCW’s “triversen”, but without the skill. I’m trying, and generally failing, to simplify my language and to wean myself off of iambs. This middle-of-the-road structure seems to help.
New leaf - thanks for the sentient pesto pic. Perfect.
Avanti!
Anyone can make bad poetry, just as any monkey can make noise come out of a piano.
Who wants to listen to a monkey playing the piano?