Post-Dated Checks

[Scrow]

Hi,

I love 'defenestration' - not least because it personifies the window as F, and also then (for me) does some visual semantic word-play around window/widow, and then has that super-lovely-simple-but-complex use of the word 'defenestration', which makes the sonics in it evoke the act of falling.

Kudos.

Sarah-Jane

[Dunc]

Steve

Hustled ─ You're really giving us our money's worth with your ekphrastic resourcefulness! How to Escape from Someone Else, just so! I also had to check whether polar bears hibernate or not, which while fascinating, wasn't as involving as the poem.

A pleasure to read.

Regards / Dunc

[JoKingly]

I'm enamored especially with S2. The paradox of a REM-less dream, and the humorous faux article headline. I'm not sure if this is your intention, but do we have a sci-fi element going on here? The concept of a dream interpreter being inside someone's dream, even trapped it in, but trapped in a way that's less of a nightmare and more of a "ugh I'm going to be late to breakfast again" kind of way is quite interesting.

Jo

[scraps]

Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

Sorella: I'm sure the interpreters that you know would never be so silly!

Sarah: Thanks for stopping by! You are such an unselfish reader and I appreciate it. I changed the window from 'it' to 'her' at the last moment. I think it really changed the poem for the better - glad it worked for you!

Dunc: I just learned that about polar bears yesterday. I was wondering if they did hibernate and, if they did, where they would go. The answer was more interesting than my question!

Jo: That's funny you got that feeling as I was reminded of this picture when I was writing that bit:

[scraps]

You weren’t supposed to see this

but someone left the lights on

and now we must ask you to please

unsee this as soon as possible.

Panicking won’t help anyone

now will it? Here, smell this.

Just inhale like normal. Ok?

Tilt your head back a bit.

Slowly. xxxxxxxxxxxxSlowly.

When I snap my fingers

all you will remember is something

about a spacecraft and you were naked

and late for class and you had forgotten

something important. Then the doctor called

to tell you your dog was a hermaphrodite

but when you looked down it wasn’t your dog

it was that baby you never had.

And wasn’t that weird?

[Sorella]

A weird dream instead of -- what? Something top secret -- and the weird dream is a perfect summary of those sequences that are really non sequiteurs and propel your dreams forward. A great opening premise and perfect pitch follow-up!

[Dunc]

Steve

You weren't supposed to see ─ is, like many of your works, a walk through a mirror maze, this one with elements of curiosity, confrontation, powerlessness, a dream of blended dreams. And with an element of bite.

Fine use of the image.

Regards / Dunc

[scraps]

Hi Sorella and Dunc - thanks for reading and commenting! Keeping with the ekphrastic again today.

[scraps]

or anyone.

why you’re here

to be viewed,

of course. describe

a day in your life.

now really have fun

with

it. funny.

we are looking

for one

of your type

to join

with us. you think you have it good

now?

just you wait.

[Sorella]

scraps,
You keep it up admirably! Clearly, the picture has several ekphrastics in it -- you are on a roll here!

Sorella

[JoKingly]

You weren't supposed to see this

Absolutely hypnotizing! My favorite lines were between the smelling salts and the bombastic dream implanted into the poem's subject.

Or anyone

I recall you saying that this month's Rattle ekphrastic wasn't inspiring to you? They better watch out when the prompt actually interests you!

-Jo

[Dunc]

Steve

or anyone ─ Zoo Recruitment Service Officers! Strictly for volunteers, of course, privateer animals. You exactly catch the tone of the pic. Admirable!

Regards / Dunc

[scraps]

Thank you my trio of loyal Seveners for your kind encouragement! One more and then, if you would like, maybe you can let me know if there is one of the six ekphrastics that you think is working best?

[scraps]

To all the daughters awake at the wrong time

raised by a memory of raised by the smell of raised by

time tremor tenor tender terror tentacles and talent talent talent

extrava gant extrava gaze extrava glance extravawake in an tingling way

corridor:xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxdreem

lemon lemony lemon me lemme lay by me on my

remember your youthful

father remember your youthful

farther remember your youthful father father father

there there

now sleep

child

[Sorella]

Why is this one scary? Is it just me at the dinner party over-eating and over-drinking? Regardless, the associations are fascinating -- you have a definite genius for language! I would say the first ekphrastic is still my favourite, all things considered.
Great to Sevens with you!
Sorella