The pewter man is a bit of an odd fellow, and his story is equally odd.
Preserving that strangest is key. I'd review this for any grammatical or technical issues, think about the chain of circumstance and narrative logic. I feel like there might be a word or two missing, as in the following:
"and he thinks too much it clogs his hearing."
should that be
"and {when} he thinks too much, it clogs his hearing."
or
"and {if} he thinks too much, it clogs his hearing."
or something like that.
This is just micro-editing. Look closely at each line.
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I think I think, therefore I might be.