Trigintiphobia

[Donner]

Hi, Steve,

"Poetry makes you gay for it" - Substitute "math" for "poetry" and it works for me.

Donna

[scraps]

Thanks Cam, Matt and Donner for stopping by and commenting. Your fluff is fluff-tastic!

Steve

[scraps]

Sex and Love Addicts Anonymous (Trailer #2)

Humor is a luxury
xxxxShame's a heaviness
Love's a switchback
xxxxSex is a strobing light
and almost weightless

[SP Singer]

Hey again,

I just re-read your Future Champs poem and laughed out loud, must have been way tired the first time!

Sex and Love Addicts Anonymous (Trailer #2)---the first line catches me up terribly, having just re-convinced myself of so much of the desperation at its core, will have to keep thinking but i don't typically pair desperation and luxury...but then again rich folks, ok.
I think you've done well to convey the addict's mind with the last statement, transports well, coincides with drug experiences. Love is a switchback stings hard.
Thanks!
SP

[scraps]

Thanks SP! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment (and your encouragement!)

Steve

[scraps]

my mother
finally out of air
and holdable

[Jee Leong]

Hi, Steve. How could I not read a poem titled "Poetry makes you gay for it"? The first lines about Emily's dashes set the bar so high that it was hard to imagine how the poem could top itself, but it did, in couleur, by closing with that dirty boy Rimbaud. I agree with the definition of sex in "Sex and Love Addicts Anonymous (Trailer #2)." The image of mother out of air is both surreal and moving. An image to keep.

[SP Singer]

The mother poem, damn
does it pop!

Thanks as always!
SP

[BrianIsSmilingAtYou]

Good stuff here.

"Poetry makes you gay for it" nice. Should "repluse" be "repulse"?

"Sex and Love Addicts Anonymous (Trailer #2)" - first line is killer.

The mother poem is simple but affecting.

BrianIs AtYou

[Scrow]

Wow at ‘poetry makes you gay’ - I love the rhymes - introspection/genuflection is fantastic, and the move from Emily Dickinson to Rimbaud is brilliant. Funny, striking and very clever.


‘Scientists find’ - I read the story about the dinosaur fossil and felt voyeuristic and a huge distance - the juxtaposition of the texts here works well I think - from small man-made dooms or possible dooms, to species annihilation. The visceral in the side effects works well, too. I’m glad someone wrote something about the finding of that fossil.


‘Once and future champs’


The swan image is beautiful & funny - the poem like a slow, slow half-real dream of future up until S2, where we’re escaping into somewhere else with the narrator, but not sure where. I like this one very much.


What glorious and disturbing transformations in your thread, and all with that twisty bite that asks questions - makes me work, which is good.


Sarah

[Janelo]

Scraps.

The mother poem pairs well daddy’s inflatables.

I know I’m right.

[scraps]

Thanks Jee, SP, Sarah, Brian and Jane - your visits are uplifting and magical!

Jee: I'm glad that worked for you! Like, really glad.

SP: pop! ha! lol

Brian: Yes, thanks for catching the typo!

Sarah: Thanks for the encouraging comments! I wasn't too sure about the rhymes, but I figured it was a silly poem so maybe the rhyme would get a little leeway.

Jane: Oh, you know I would never disagree with a leap of yours - but that guy? that guy hadn't even seen a poem naked yet - lol.

Thanks again,

Steve

[scraps]

vagina machine

the elephants walk
back
to the watering hole
back
to before you were born
back
through the chaos

[Sorella]

scraps,
Dipping into threads as I cast about for inspiration, I happen upon this genius, scraps aka Steve. Poetry makes you gay for it shows us how to handle NaPo with aplomb! Poems about poetry were never q u i t e like this. Get it published and soon.
You're a total role model who can surely launch any of us petty pedestrian poets into outer space.
Kudos!

Sorella

[scraps]

Sorella,

You have elevated encouragement into an art form - you made me smile, for sure! Thank you for taking the time to read, to comment, to encourage - it's a true gift!

Steve